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The Art Gallery / Re: The KAIZAverse
« on: October 22, 2014, 03:20:40 AM »
Fujiwara no Mokou from Touhou.

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General Discussion / Re: Fate/Stay Night: Unlimited Blade Works Anime
« on: October 21, 2014, 06:55:33 PM »
So how about that dubstep Zerker?

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The Art Gallery / Re: The KAIZAverse
« on: October 21, 2014, 07:13:36 AM »


Well, I probably won't be done with this one for a while. Decided to try some more pose practice using some reference pictures; this time trying a bit more "actiony" one. Not sure if the reference I used is "actiony" enough (since I suck at finding good references), but it's worth practicing at least.

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Fan Clubs / Re: Cherry Blossom Club
« on: October 10, 2014, 12:53:11 AM »
@Kaiza
aren't they? Pretty sure, Gen five, it's evolution counts as legendary.
Nope; you can breed Larvesta and Volcarona (only breedable Legendary is Manaphy, and you only get Phione which can't evolve into Manaphy), plus you can get plenty of them wild in the X and Y safari. Also, Legendary Pokemon don't evolve. Larvesta is more like the "unique" Pokemon you are given as a gift, kinda like Beldum in Gen III.

Trust me; this is coming from someone who has all 719 available Pokemon at his disposal.

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Fan Clubs / Re: Cherry Blossom Club
« on: October 09, 2014, 05:22:13 PM »
Those ain't legendary Pokemon. They are pretty kickass, though.

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 07:16:56 PM »
I mentioned the prologue there, lantz (the three characters planning something part). I grouped it with the first chapter because both of them are in the same post. And, no, the prologue didn't imply it was a time travel story either. Again, we had to be TOLD by you for us to even realize it was.

Honestly, I give up.

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 07:09:36 PM »
@Kaiza

it's a time travel story, I AM ESTABLISHING THE SETTING. Secondly Shirou is forty nine years old when Satoshi is eighteen, excuse me for taking forty chapters to explain all that has happened since the time he was born and then the new cast as the hero grows up.

there's a lot to tell and giving the readers context is important.

@Bdoom

you lie, Justica is never mentioned in the four chapters, you are thereby complaining for no reason.
I'll just say this, one last time.
Just going by the first chapter, the hook of the story. At no point, when reading the first chapter, did I think "Hm, yeah, this is a time travel story." When I read it, the impression I got was "Hm, OK, so there's these three characters, they're planning something and...what...the...why are we...they're wrestling...and ORT...how..."

What that means, is that you FAILED TO ESTABLISH THE SETTING. You tried to establish a mystery, and it was OK-ish, but you utterly failed the second, most important part.

The only reason I know it's a time travel story, and that it's another universe, is because YOU TOLD US. We didn't get that from the story, we had to be told, out of story, by the author. That is a no-no.

Also, Bdoom, please, don't reply to him. That's bound to just aggravate both you and lantz; and I don't think anybody wants to deal with another argument. =_=

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 06:51:07 PM »
Well, technically it is on topic, since we were discussing the issues about the story, and these were just examples. If things were going off-topic, I would have cut this discussion long ago, when I asked you yesterday to just leave the thread be.

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 06:47:03 PM »
Yeah, but Sakura is not a flat or poorly-developed character, and she's developed in that way because she has to be for the story to work. The problem is that a lot of people just fast-forward through her development because they want to see flashy fight scenes....
That wasn't the point, Mike. He was saying she's perceived as undeveloped by alot of people, not that she is underdeveloped.
It doesn't help that the entire "Dark Sakura" issue ended up giving a lot of people the wrong ideas about her. Turning villainous in your own route while the other characters get more development because of it did not do the character any favors...

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 06:42:44 PM »
Or, hell, just look at Kotomine vs. Zouken. Kotomine was an established villain in Fate, and even if he had a lesser role in UBW, he had a more prominent role and development in HF. Zouken only appears in HF, and as a result, his entire development is either rushed or expanded outside the story. Now, tell me, which of these two characters people find more interesting?

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 06:37:46 PM »
As an example, compare Rin's development vs. Sakura's development in FSN. (No offense to any fans)

Rin is introduced very early, and has the entire story to develop her character, to varying degrees. Prologue and Fate establish who she is, UBW gives her some development, and HF continues that development while also expanding her backstory and such.

Sakura, on the other hand...while she's also introduced early on, and she has some establishing moments, she has practically no (visible) role in the first two routes. It isn't until HF that we get to see some development for her, and unfortunately, even this had to share a spotlight with A LOT of other plot developments in her route. As a result, a lot of people tend to overlook Sakura for the other characters, who had been established in prior routes and thus (to them) seemed much more interesting.

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 06:28:35 PM »
Also, it should NEVER take so much time to establish your characters.

Every single story out there establishes their characters on their very first appearance. Notice I said ESTABLISH; you don't have to tell us EVERYTHING about the character, all their powers, their history and all that flair. No, no, no...you just have to give us enough info about them so that we KNOW who they are. That way, we can become invested in them, and you can start peppering the other details throughout the story. If you've given us a reason to care about them, we will want to know more about them.

Notice how characters introduced early in stories tend to be better developed than ones introduced very late; it's for that very reason. When introduced late, you have very little time to add all the details, so they tend to either be reduced to just the basics (and if you're lucky, expanded later on), or outright dumped all at once. Their characterization tends to be rushed as well. On the other hand, if you establish your characters early, you have the entire length of the story to give more insight unto them and give them some good character development.

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 06:14:31 PM »
For an example: let's say I begin my story with a man being murdered. Next scene, the main character begins with either "Last night, my father was murdered." or "Last night, a man was murdered."

Even though both lines are nearly the same, with just a few words swapped, they both establish completely different things about the setting; they both give us a different understanding of the situation the mystery's being built upon.

Hell, you can add another layer of mystery with the latter line; if I have the main character be like one of those obsessed cops, the latter line can mask his motivation. Either he's like that because of an earlier failed case with the same criminal, a similar case, he's just obsessive like that, or perhaps the victim was very close to him?

And even if I don't go for that second layer and use the former line, the mystery works just as well. The mystery is still "who murdered Person X and why?". It doesn't take anything away from it, while at the same time giving us some understanding to stand on.

That's what we're asking. Something to understand what's going on, a common ground, something to give us a reason to care for the story and be curious about the mystery it presents. As it is, there isn't any of that.

And, before you say it; no, just because it's OC-centric doesn't mean it's bad. I've seen a couple of good Nasuverse fics which center on OCs and/or go outside the known established stories. But what sets them apart is that, despite having no ties to canon characters and doing their own thing, they still FEEL like a Nasuverse story. They do an excellent job in establishing the setting and thus people can relate to them. It also helps they're very well written and thus enjoyable on their own.

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 05:49:26 PM »
Again, don't confuse "spoiling the mystery" with "establishing the setting".

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Lantz's fics / Re: character Q and A
« on: October 02, 2014, 05:25:30 AM »
Just leave it be, Bdoom. Please. For your own sake.

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